You have such amazing flow. The rhythm and rhyme seem effortless and natural. It's beautiful. As far as technique, this poem is one of the most interesting I've ever read on Fictionpress. And it's well worded and eloquently expressed. Good on you, mate.

Very good descriptions. The boy you know must be very cerebral.

Beautiful, especialy the line, "As on his tongue the Gods scribe their law."

OH GOD! NEW FAVE POEM! I LOVE IT! My fave stanza was " As on his tounge the Gods scribe their law" THAT IS SO COOLIO!

Thanks for reviewing me!

Keep on writing

Nessa

oh, this is a sweet poem. though, i would check your spelling.

very sweet... I like it a lot.. nice descriptions.. tahnks for your review

just lovely! i especially like the line "the words write themselves on the curve of his lips". love your writing.

O This was really good ! Your very very very very very very very talented ! -
Noelle

ah i like this. a very good poem ppl can so relate to, like me! i like it and thanks for reviewing mine ;)

Don't you like bizarre thoughts from boys? I absolutely love that. It sums up nicely something I once felt... felt? Well, good poem,going on my fav. Thank you so much for reviewing my stuff.

I like this piece a lot. You did a great job with the rhyming, it was very natural; didn't seem forced. A few grammatical errors but nothing that really took away from it really. And thanks loads for reviewing some of my stuff XD

quick and sweet, this is nice