end seemed to come very suddenly, but i guess, that's what most dreams do. Nice job.

This flowed well and the descriptions of 'paradise' was pleasant..One complain is the abruptness of the revalation that it was a dream..made it kind of comical.. Do keep writing (hope my frankness's ok with u)

Aw;..the poem made me feel all happy, but then it was just a dream. Aw shucks! Great poem.

So poetic, so strong...I loved the symbolisim.

You wrote something new, yay!Its rewally cool. I like it. Its very youee.