wow. were did you come up with this? i like this a lot. i think you took a fairy tale and gave it a drop of reality. lol i really so like it. love your metaphors and details :)
love,
amber

the fragmented format really worked for this poem. i loved the last four lines, they were just breath-takingly beautiful.

Very nice. I liked it.
EvilNeko13

wow... that's beautifully written.. amazing job