Ooh, I don't usually read a lot of haikus, but this one I really like. Yes, very angsty.

Aw I love haiku!Brilliant :)

I like how you kept up your first attempt. It shows how is grew and changed. I liked the second one better, the lack of words can add much meaning.

Keep it up.

I love Haiku. This is a really good one. )

Thanks a bunch for the help everyone, I've made the changes!

Great tone and topic. To format into haiku would look something like—
My lie reflects hers (or, Lies reflecting lies)
One door leads to another,—
Tourist I remain.
Haiku—17 syllables (5-7-5) or you could expand to a tanka—31 syllables (5-7-5-7-7)

wow..I mean whew...thats just...short and great..

yeah! your first haiku! I liked it. one thing though, a haiku has 5-7-5 syllable count. You were a little off, but still, you captured a moment and a feeling, which is great! Keep up the great work
jya ne