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| Lethal Dosage 2007-08-13 ch 38,  | abuseThank you very much for your review! I have come to return the favor, though belatedly. Truthfully, I have been reading this story for a while, but I've been to lazy to review. Heh sorry. I would give you some CC but at the moment I am a bit short on time. Again, I apologize. ~~LD |
| shadowofthekryptonite 2007-05-05 ch 1, | abusei was so long your reader before...now is my comeback! i missed your stories! i just drop by to say i still support you, and will always throughout!yay! i need to go,i'll be back and read all the stories i missed! i promise! |
| Arkady I 2006-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI have only so far read the first chapter, but your ability with words and your depictions are absolutely wondrous! I shall read more, eagerly! |
| Miller8 2005-12-03 ch 6, | abuseGood action scenes here. I likes it. However, I've gotta stop reading before my eyes give out, though I'll be back sometime soon. Keep it up! |
| Wanker103 2005-11-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseGod why do you bother?This is more pathetic than the excuses that President Bush makes for invading Iraq! The plot is weaker than the straw house you idiot must live in and the characters behave like a republican on crack (ie homosexual and illogical). Then you try and cover this hooker's hole of a story by naming the characters like they are you typical star wars fan-freak. Please give up, you have no place on the esteemed throne of humanity, let alone atempting the menial task of word stringing. This is a disgrace and if I see your name in the paper next to the words "suicide" and "dead" I shall rejoice. Be gone, you are truly PATHETIC. |
| Miller8 2005-11-18 ch 4, | abuse"Silence smirked subtly"... So simple yet such an eye-catching phrase. I don't think I would have thought of something like that. Anyways, three chapters read today to bring it to four in total and I like what I'm reading. As I said in my last review, you might put it in in later chapters but paragraph breaks would make it easier to read. Later! - Ben |
| Miller8 2005-11-18 ch 2, | abuseTwo things. Firstly, you might have done this in later chapters but paragraph breaks make reading easier. I learnt that after several people complained about one line being about an event and the next being something totally unrelated. Unless you actually read the story on Fictionpress though, you don't really notice it. Second thing, yeah, it's a ** when you add a chapter and then read it through and realise you made a mistake - especially if the mistake is glaring and you missed it several times previous. Don't I know just how easy it is to have a hundred people read the chapter - including myself and then suddenly come across the most painstakingly obvious mistake that might change the way people view the line/event/paragraph or whatever. But with that said this is a class story with fantastic description and amazing imagery. Every word seems to leap out at you and grab you. I love it! |
| Miller8 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abuseJust had time to read this chapter. I think it's a good start. Will try to keep reading frequently. It's a bit difficult with work at the moment. |
| FireDragonBL 2005-10-16 ch 20, anon. | abusewell, nice job again... the plot is going smoothly now i suppose ^ ^ though the action scene could be extended... ~Kite~ |
| temblance 2005-10-02 ch 9, | abuseNice chapter. Sorry it's taking me so long to catch up...I really want to but schools been crazy. I like the shorter length chapters- they're easier to read when I don't have much time. But good job. |
| FireDragonBL 2005-09-29 ch 18, | abuseYes that was short... good work again ^ ^ update soon... ~Kite~ |
| FireDragonBL 2005-09-29 ch 15, | abusehm...and you said you weren't interested in girl-boy relationships...heh... well again, good work, though you still could use more descriptions to setting and action... ~Kite~ |
| FireDragonBL 2005-09-29 ch 13, | abuselol, i thought it was a ratehr amusing chapter, this one, with the introductions...adn the knives ^ ^ the knives part was hilarious... oh yeah, thx for the review, could you read on? ~Kite~ |
| FireDragonBL 2005-09-29 ch 10, | abusethat was great writing again, but you might want to make use of the section dividers on the edit section of your upload page. it'd helped readers a lot by clearing presenting a change in scenes. again, it was great, though you could describe the surrounding a bit more sometimes... ~Kite~ |
| FireDragonBL 2005-09-29 ch 5, | abuse^ ^ again great story so far, even without a plot...lol~Kite~ |