Holy **! The descriptions of the woman was good, as well as the other stuff. Maybe add 'there was no sound except for the scratching of the scrayon or something like that beasue silence seems odd.

Maybe you could remove some of the exclamation marks formt he story dialogue.

I lvoed the ending. I really like this,b ecasue it was so odd and chiling, even though it wwas perfectly 'normal'.

Whoa... that story was really interesting. I didn't get bored at all. Its kind of scary 'the perfect kid develouping center?' I've always wanted to read this story at the bottom of your page. It sad and sort of scary.

Miss-Nina

a world of blondes? god its a nightmare...

This is a cool short! I never really read, glad this was my first. It was almost twilight zone. good job.

Well, err... Interesting?

Its kinda interesting, but it really points out only one thing, that in the future everyone will be the same. That's a good point to check out once in a while. Make you remember where you came from and who you are. Good job. Except for making them all blond Thinking--> Its good I'm not blond jejeje ^_^'

Je Dehors, merci pour votre revue et esperent que vous ecrivez plus. Laterz...