I really like it, your style is so original. Please write more!

Good story. I love the descriptions and the interesting characters you created. Um...it really sounds like your rushing through the whole story. It was like: Kit got into a fight. Kit went to jail. Kit saved Rowena. Then she woke up. And then you ended it. It's okay to slow down and give some backround information. You can talk about maybe Kit's love for Rowena and how jealous he was. Wonderful story.

An interesting story, with some good descriptions, but horribly unfinished. I've noted there are some other storys about Kit on your page, maybe you should compile them so they can be more like chapters in one bigger story. just a thought, would make it easier and more consistant for the reader. A little more character development might be nice, but it's a good short story, even if the ending is rather abrupt. Keep up the writing, and thanks for finding and reviewing my stuff (however you managed that)-Keilah