Interesting... now the plots coming out a bit. I wonder what awaits Raven and Mitch?
Your plot is genuinely interesting and I like reading this story and I'm wondering where you'll go next. I also find the fact that Mitch is so lecherous to be pretty funny. Maybe they'll be some humour in this too, yes? ^-^
Okay, quick comment on the grammar (her comes my well-rounded critique). I would suggest shortening your paragraphs by a lot just so it doesn't look quite so chunky and it makes it easier to read. Also, this is the more major one, when a different person talks you start a new paragraph.
for Example:

"Darling you've grown more beautiful than ever" said a voice just behind her. Raven sighed, one of the many banes of her existence was Julius and his stupid infatuation with her. Admittedly six hundred years ago he was considered a potential lover, back before she got to know him, but now days he was a pain in the neck.
"How can I have, the last time I looked I was the same" she said turning to face him. His blue eyes showed warmth when only minutes ago they showed dogged obedience.
It helps to give a good idea of who's talking and it makes the stoyr much easier to read. If you look in how they write professionally it will give you a better idea than I can.
Other than that though this is a good story with a neat plot. I hope to read more soon. Great job!

hey, the truth is (and I'm not trying to sound mean...) I think you should leave this part out. The thing is, your prologue is an awesome way to get people into the story and then to continue into character descriptions sort of pulls you out of the mood. In all honesty, you should simply describe the characters as you write about them. It makes the story flow more smoothly and that way we can learn about characters from their actions rather than from a quick narrative. Sorry, I'm not trying to be mean and maybe other people like this style... but that's my opinion anyway. ^-^

Sounds cool. I like the ideas that seem to be begining in the prologue. Also the fact that you used real people from history is interesting.
One thing is that, rather than simply giving a narrative, you could have made it someone telling the story to someone else. For instance take place somewhere and a story starts telling people about the Daemons, am I making any sense... I'm so bad at explaining things! The reason for this is it would help make it into more of a story rather than giving us a narrative. Other than that though, I really like what I've read so far and I'm planning to continue. Great job.