Not a bad start! I'm interested in seeing what happens next.

That was really good. Are you going to write any more? please do. it had just the right amount of text and speech. not too much of either.

heyaz. kk, minor typos and could use some descriptions on characters and surroundings. Pretty good though, you definitely can feel teh tension between characters :) great job on that. I love the ending! anyways, keeps it up!

I know this is very short but all of my western sotires are actually about one character. They are different points in his life, i just haven't decided how i'm going to connect them yet. Please read and review.