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| Ebony Glasse 2005-09-14 ch 5,   | I LOVE UR STORY! It's GREA-A-A-AT! Although the houses..um...connections..er...BLAH thingy's are kinda confusing, the story line is practically perfect! LOVE IT! Pls update soon!! |
| Liviania 2005-06-15 ch 5, | It's interesting how everything ties together...so far I've only finished reading Advent Complex and what you have up of this one, but you can bet I'm going to read the rest. (Thanks for your great review on 30 Thrones...I need to collect my papers and put up the next chapter. Really) Livi |
| Crazy In 88 2005-05-19 ch 5, | This was great. My apologies for not checking this out sooner. You have truly grown in skill. I'm gonna do the tedious teacher thing and say that you had a couple run on's, but, I'm not perfect myself and they didn't steal attention away from the story. If they had, I wouldn't have read the whole thing. The plot thickens, ay? I hope you continue on this and I hope they all can help Japan say "bye bye" to the evil drug shark yakuza once and for all.-Yin |
| Ash of The Wind 2005-05-10 ch 2, | Sorry about my last review. I was just mad about something. I like this chapter. Its sort of long but I can read long stuff I get into. Nice dialogue. I enjoy reading dialogue when someone can actually do it right. |
| Ash of The Wind 2005-05-09 ch 1, | You cocky fucking asshole. You think you're the best but you're not. You're under me you little shit. By the way, your prologue sucks. |
| flowingblood 2005-04-29 ch 1, | Very intreging ^^ this is an awesome story, I read it four times now, you grammar is perfect, kudos to you (sorry about the last review I was in a rush I meant; how did you get the picture on your lookup? he he sorry :/) |
| inferno tempest 2005-04-20 ch 1, | I LOVED IT! great! |
| Crazy In 88 2005-02-15 ch 4, | Yay! Good work! post more soon! -Yin |
| Crazy In 88 2005-02-15 ch 3, | Good work! This is very interesting. Hey um- if you um, get the chance- could you hceck out "Ninja Star" and "Fight School". No reviews thus far. Keep writing! _Yin |
| KonekOniko 2005-02-12 ch 4, | ay ah! Kakyou's on a writing spree! you never disappoint me; superb job, as always! hope to see more from ya soon 'cause this is too good to be discontinued! ~Sumi |
| Misuno / Gin Uyoku Kou 2005-02-12 ch 4, | Whe! XD lol Ya updated, awesomeness. Cool story, me wubs it. lol Yeah i know..my english is really slipping...XD But oh well, live with it. lolUpdate soon! |
| KonekOniko 2005-02-06 ch 3, | ay, I was so busy I forgot to review @-@ well, kakyou, what can I say? the story was just awesome, as usual. I love the stylized action, it was just...amazing. Well, I have more stuff to catch up on, hope to see an update from you soon! keep writing! ~Sumi-chan, A whisper in the wind, love... |
| Crazy In 88 2005-01-10 ch 2, | First off, sorry for the long delayed review for this chapter. I've taken an elongated hiatus, but as you can see, took the time to change my name. This is probably one of the best stories you have written. From a fellow yakuza writers standpoint, though, it seems a little soft. But, then that's probably just your writing style...not being mean because you are an excellent writer. Better than...me. Anyways, keep working on this story. I'll be watching from the shadows. |
| Myukiori 2005-01-06 ch 3, | Oh. Okay. I get it now. You didn't update for so long I had to read the first chapter to understand. Cuz I had already forgotten the stuff from before. So I guess it means, you have to update fast or else ppl will forget what you worte from before. But that's just me. ^^ |
| Aimers 2004-12-23 ch 2, | Toodles rhymes with noodles!Sorry, that was just my first thought after reading this at your request. It's not fair! You took all the good names!! What am I supposed to do for my story?!?! (LOL) Looking forward to read the rest,Myu-chan. ^^ |