That would make a great song with a tune! You should send it to some famous Christian singer and charge them to sing it or something.Or sing it yourself and get famous/rich:P

WOW this is awesome song! I really like the line:
"I¡¯m lost out here in the devil¡¯s game"
I think it describes exactly this world... :] wat do you think? I have one praise song out so please come check it out!

Ha! Not at all terrible. Very nice and encouraging message you put across, well done, you're spreading God's name. :D