Interesting plot and description. I look forward to reading the next story.

i like it! i think its cool, tho i keep thinkin of x-men, the film wiv the academy u kno? tho, thats a gd thing, i think its cool! cdnt make my mind up if demeter was her father or not, spose he was afta all! onli thing i noticed, u spelt 'quite' as 'quit' a few times... thats all! cool overall, now goin 2 the nxt 1!!

reeli like this so far! i think uve made it very realistic. [added to faves list...]

oo, bad guy alert me thinks...

oo, this sounds very good atm, seens as ive onli read the 1st chappie... its def drawin me into the story already, tho perhaps more description of the place they r at, wat dus the house look like?? is it in the mountains, by the sea, in a town? wat dus the stanger look like? how is she dressed? wat time period is it in? soz, jst a few qus, im sure will all b answered neway in the next chapter, bt onli givin u a few ideas to make this a bit longer n even more intruigin. hope this helps.*~Mage Dudette~*

um, just out of curiosity, your title...did you put macigal on purpose?

And what exactly is the gift? I NEED TO KNOW! Update so i can find out. Anyway, this is really good. The only thing is some of the sentence structuring is a little hard to understand...the idea is fantastic though...i just need to know what happens next!
Update!
~Nessa~