WOW! Certainly an EXITING story! AND ITS ONLY THE FIRST CHAPTER! Amazing! I almost thought I went though at LEAST 5 chapters until I got to the bottom and realized it was still the first!

Oh I like this! I love how you've changed the fairytale world around.

Okay, the truth is, I usually don't bother with reviewing stories that haven't been updated in more than six months or so. But let's face it...Undone is exceptional.

Everything in this story is absolutely wonderful...I've honestly loved every bit of it...The characters, the character dynamics, the story, the humor, the intrigue, the outright satire...I think that's my favorite part, actually. Undone is how fairy tales should be. As we get older, we realize how insipid and whiny fairy-tale princesses are, how ridiculous the romances are. Way to correct that. You deserve an award.

Something else I found just beyond impressive is how all your characters, even the more minor ones like the guards and various villains, are real people, not just...flat drawing on paper. Does that make sense? Anyway, wonderful characterization. Oh, and something else I have to congratulate you on: making likable, talented characters without making those perfect Mary-Sue/Gary-Stu-ish ones we all hate.

I think Eleanor is my favorite character. That's remarkable in its own right. I tend to hate female characters in any sort of fantasy. :D Again, go you.

Anyway, this was pretty ramble-y, but I just had to let you know how much I enjoyed your story. I sincerely hope that Undone hadn't died... :)

~RTA

I don't usually even get past the first chapter of a fantasy story before tuning out, but this story has kept entranced the whole way. I love all the different dynamics of relationships and the well crafted hints at things that haven't been revealed yet.

I'd usually give up on something that's gone so long with no updates, but I want to read the rest of this story so bad... please continue...

I found this fiction bookmarked on my computer from a few months back, so I decided to read it. After recognizing the first two chapters, I have no idea why I never went on to read the remaining ones because I haven't been able to tear my eyes away from it up till chapter 15 (I suspect it was because by the second chapter, I had the foresight to realize it would enchant me to the point where I was frothing at the mouth because there was no "next chapter" button. I should have made a "read when marked complete" note to myself at that time. Now I'm at a loss with what to do with my life.)

Hopefully I started reading at the right time and you're going to decide to update after over a year. I'm in utter denial that you might have been distracted by your shinies and would rather spend the rest of your life with them, rather than catering to the needs of your desperate readers. Your desperate, very adoring readers.

This is amazing so far! I really hope you haven't given up on this story, because it has so much potential. I love your writing style!

Oh, please write more. This story is so captivating, I have to know what happens next!

Oh god, I tried avoiding reading this story for as along as I could but...I finally gave in. Ah, what happened to Bane?! I'm dying to find out! I loved every single chapter, and I can honestly say that I was reading your story rather than doing homework like I should have XD; Please update soon!

More please? :)

So I'm gunna assume you've read Tithe, because, hey, it's an awesome book, yeah?

Well this is better.

Like a million times better.

I would rather read this than Holly Black's stuff any day. Any day.

I totally heart Bane by the way. :)

Ack! I've spent the whole night reading this and now I'll be fretting for an indeterminate amount of time to fine out what happens to everyone! This story is thoroughly engrossing. And addictive, seeing as it is now dawn and I've been reading all night! I've really enjoyed immersing myself in this story you've woven. I shall now go off and fret about Bane and Aiden as well as what trouble Eleanor has gotten herself into with the mirrors, and all the mischief the rest of the lot are sure to get up to.
Thank you for writing!
jess

I feel the need to review this story
I am quite fascinated with fairy tales and while others may just write using them as a base
Yours I say hold a rein on their own.
The twist, the use of fae magic, etc. Inspiring to say the least, just truly inspiring, and I do hope you continue with this story.
Just one thing to add, as a critique I guess: I found that sometimes my eyes skim over paragraphs, but that was in the earlier chapters. Though I don't think you need to fix those much, once you read up to this chapter, you kinda get use to it.
Well, have a good day,and I do look forward to reading your other stories.

So far awesome story. I can't wait to read more about Elenor and her family. As well as Ella and Tristan.

I am seriously loving this fic, and oh wow, what a painful cliffhanger to leave it on. Looking forward to the rest of it. =)

Oh, brilliant chapter. That kiss from Bane was so long in coming; the whole scene made me want to weep. Bane's hug...*wibble* There's so much good mystery in here the suspense is killing me. So cruel of you to throw in that bit about the mirrors while we're still scrabbling with all that's happening with Bane. I hope you won't keep us waiting too long for another chapter, though they're well worth the wait!