|Reviews for The Prowler|
| rhyne 11/8/04 . chapter 1
I like this poem a lot. I like the way you started the third line... I like the imagery, the words used... Just about everything.
Well, maybe not the last line... It begs the next question, how old are you? You don't want to give attention to yourself when you're describing a scene like this one. Instead of refering to yourself, just say that she's young. Give more description of the middle-aged man.