This is great. Very good Charecter devlopment and plot. But the chapters are a bit long. I would suggest you break each episode up into scenes. Cause when most people see all this reading they dont read. BUt good job. If you get a chance can u check out my manga. Demon Hunter X

You write great stories. I love reading them. They're ver descriptive and have great characters. I get excited whenever I see a new chapter's been put up :o)

Hey this is really great! Well written and very vivid. Lot's of good details! I love it!