hey a bit of forced rhyming in sdome parts but a good message and fairly well written keep writing!

Nice... I think the rhyme added to the effect rather than take away from it.
Lisa

c'est vrai...et c'est un bon poem...vie est bonne...d'accord, je taise maintenent...a bientot!
vish

I love the format! Very nicely said too. Keep up the good work