Wow. This is awesome. The progression is incredible and the meaning...Wow.

Whoa, this is really cool. It gradually gets more to what your really meaning to say. I really like the last line.

wow... dark and sort of depressing... but at the same time ..it was excellent!!

the progression of the poem is great! I like the play on words almost and the twisted end. Keep up the great work

*blinks* Wow. An interesting little poem...
~Daphne~

Yikes! That's down right evil for romance! Sounds like something a demon would say to its victimed love. Very dark, and pierces the heart! *shudder* Good though! :-D