This was beautiful. You managed to put so much raw feeling, and created such a descriptive story with only these tiny 22 lines. The vocabularly was outstandingly relevent & the ryhming was done with an expertise that famous poets would congratulate. This is definately being added to my favourites. Well done, & if your other work is anything like this, then you should have an ego the size of the moon. Keep writting. D:

wonderful poem. sorry i never got around to reviewing any of your work when you reviewed me a while back..or if i did and i forgot about it...anyways, sorry for rambling, great poem.

that was an excellent poem. very well written and has wonderful imagry

Wow. Scaryish but good

wow really excellent poem, just very flowy...so lovely...muchly enjoyed reading it

It's well written. I love it.