 scudcrow 2004-11-14 . chapter 1Seemed like the feelings of an ebulient tyro on my first read. However, I must say that you do go into details w/o too much info about his feelings. But since you said that "Of the love that...because I can't Express it...", I'd said this is a good poem of you being quite expressive, on the contrary.
Also the last line about being agressive or patient leaves many wondering (because love is patient, kind, and giving--it's never jealous; always strong and ready to face whatever that comes)! Je l'aime.
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