i like how this flows so smoothly ;)

O.o thats so brilliant... all my war poems are kinda dumb and so junior high lol

wicked! i loved the choice of words. It was intense! keep it up.

Nice song. I love the chours(or whatever) part. "Moves along, moves along;
My existence is forgotten" I love that line, and the last verse is my favorite. "Move along, move along", That's definitely gonna stick in my head for the rest of the school day. lol. (Yeah, I'm at school, WHAT WHAT?! lol. j/k)

I hope you update soon.

~*Crazy Baiko*~

(I just read my last review for "Roswell that Ends Well", well, there was a mistake. I met to say "I'm NOT asking you to change your writing style", instead of "I'm asking you to change your writing style". Because that sounds pretty ignorant, and that's not what I met. I should start proofreading my reviews for now on.)

OH MY GOODNESS! AMAZING! absolutely fabulas, i love the way you do things in a song format, i cant for the life of me get my head around doing that! this has got to be my favorite yet, i love the image "lay me in the fields of cotton" absolutely Beautifull!

Very nice writing. You can tell BR played an inspiration on this. Good work.

I like this song. the chorus is good, and i love the last lines, "move along move along, though my conscience remains twisted..."
rachgoth16

i like this its so amazing... its so insanely true... nice repition and powerful poem

(Carry on, carry on, as if nothing really matters)
Wow, very true, very true! And I can even hear the B.R. undertones, easily, which is good because that song rocks! If only we could hear some of your stuff to, you know, good music. That'd be awesome!