really well written. simple but very effective!

so far this is my favorite

Cool. I like this a lot. Great work.
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The Great, the Mighty, the Orc King

wow who can't relate to that... good use of all those poetic devices.. yeah. good job!

I like this, I really like your writing when your not writing about love, love is just not my bag, BUT THIS IS COOL! :) SHAZAAM

You need some sort of punctuation at the end. It's a fairly simply stated poem, but there's a lot of emotion, and we can all relate...