HI!. good story so far I'm liking it.

please update soon

see ya

To get this one, I had to read it twice.

I think it would be better without the fourth paragraph. On top of the girlfriend issue, the broken family (and dead sister) , this 'I am a disease' adds a complication to this part of the narrative - He is about to kick out angrily at Brad, which is the opposite.

A piece of reflection on how things go wrong for him because of the way he is, expanded, would be good - but not where you have put it in the text.

A good continuation on Ch1.

Well, that's one way to kill off your MC! Not really many nitpicky things here. A few more commas are needed (not very many but eg: paragraph beginning 'In spite of all the star...' - should be a comma between 'squad' and 'every.' You have also spelt 'fourth' as 'forth.'But really, very few problems and easy to read.