i loved it! i can't wait for the next update!

Harr.

T'alnoth of the Gold Flight:

A mutual friend of ours redirected me here. Two coppers for guessing who's the dragon-lover.

-Bajillions of spelling errors. "Meat" for "meet", "There" for "their", and the such.

THE SPELLCHECKER IS NOT YOUR FRIEND, AND NEVER WILL BE.

Get into the habit of proofreading your works and getting two too three beta readers if you can; they help enormously.

-Wait. She causes a whole lot of damage to other stalls...(the wine) and the shopkeepers don't demand compensation? Somehow, I don't think Syl being fired would pay for their broken goods...

-"She tossed the poster to the ground and placed her hands in her pocket."

That's a really funny image.

-"Holster" is associated with guns, and I'm not sure if it's the right word to use. "sheath" or "scabbard" would have been better.

-There's a thing I like to call the "Emotional meteorological fallacy". Simply put, it's the author messing around with the weather to suit the "mood" of the story, and no other reason for the weather to occur. Example: the heroine cries, and it starts to drizzle. A villain speaks, or a hero swears revenge, and lightning flashes in the background.

It's stupid, and at best only gives unecessary drama.

Now, I'm not accusing you of doing this-yet. But we'll see.

-"“It seems you’ll be living for a bit longer human, but if you speak about what you have seen I will be back for you.”"

How long does it take to push a blade into one's throat? A fraction of a second?

...

Utter stupidity, and I HATE stupidity in supposedly intelligent characters. What wonderful characterization.

-She's been treatened with death from one of the supposedly most powerful creatures in this world, and instantly forgets about it the moment she's invited to dinner.

-"Karin sighed at her friend’s comment and put a fox arm..."

Foxes are not in the feline family. Fail.

Well it seems the Celestials and the Reapers and beginning to get weary of one another. I guess we would've expected that, but one would have to wonder how they'd managed to get along all this time.

Will be interesting to see how Shi has to deal with his new companions. No doubt to say they'll be driving him nuts for the while, heh.

My goodness, this is an awesome piece of writing! Some grammer problems here and there, mostly little ones, but you have done a great job with this one. Keep up the good work, I see nothing really problimatic with this, besides the minor grammer errors. Of course it's only about three or four a chapter. Good luck with continuing this story of deceit and mystery! And keep up the good fighting scenes!

Let's see...

What I like about this chapter:The story is progressing nicely.A new race was introduced.There's now a 'thrid' party to 'meddle' with the happenings.In other words, things just got more exciting.

What I don't like about this chapter:The fight scene was a little hard to follow.Character actions are a little too predictable, I can't really give an exact example of an improvement. Basically, you've got the ice-cream, the spoon and the cream. Only thing you're missing is the cherry.Lastly, Raja got kicked. I hope something in the near future haunts you about writing that. >_>

Other than that, keep writing ^_~

I assume the reason his father decides to send Shi in alone is because he doesn't want anyone on the 'council' to know about it.

Hmm, when these great orders go bad...they go really bad...

Sylvia's friends seem to react to Shi much as you'd expect them to. With regards to the later part, their outburst feels just right, not too much or too soft.

I get the feeling that some part of this will be with Shi having to deal with his own feelings towards 'mortals', and with how the 'outside' world sees him as.Thinking about it, considering they use that term, they must regard themselves as being very high up. But it still seems they can be killed.

Seems that it's easy enough for the reapers to kill normal mortals, but it's different when it comes to the reaper hunters.Do these reaper hunters have more special talents? On the other hand, Shi is one of the tops...

Shi shows quite a bit more personality that just being a 'heartless killer'.

But when someone who considers himself pretty high caliber goes down, must be pretty ** his feelings.

Hm, sometimes, I think the audience could do with recaps of how some characters looked like, esp if they haven't appeared for a while / don't appear much.Hard to decide when and such though.

Another great chapter. I enjoy seeing the character development, especially the relationship between Sylvia and Shi. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Shi's sneering, disrespectful arrogant to humans, and I find I like him for that. ^-^ Well done!

Sylvia's a much stronger character now, showing that she, while appearing demure, has some fire within, at least. ^_^ Protective friends everywhere, huh?

At last, Prime shows something that makes him more than just a heartless Reaper who is efficient at his job... ^_^ Shi would be happy to know that Prime cared. Pity he doesn't.

Dragons as grim reapers, now that's something you don't see everyday. It's almost hard to anticipate what is going to happen next! Please keep writing!

This is awsome! It's about the characters we made along time ago!!

You know other than a few spelling and grammar errors, it's very well done ^.^

The title for chapter 2 is just cute! ^-^ The idea of barstools and blades together just had me chuckling. Don't ask me why. I don't quite know either.

I'm reading just to get glimpses of Reaper Shi. He's an extremely intriguing character, strangely complex and yet, easy to empathise with.

He reminds me of how I feel in my darker moments: Ready to kill and hurt, but unlike him, without a purpose and aim in mind. Yet, I don't have his self-control, or his skills, for that matter.

Priest Balto deserved to die, sort of. He trafficked with demons and betrayed the holy charge he was responsible for. Yet he was a priest, and that must count for something. After all, not everyone can be a priest just like that, right? It's sad that he got corrupted somewhere along the way.

As for Yuski, *howl hiss boo jeer* I don't like him. Yet, I udnerstand how he thinks: Power and more power. One of the characters I write is -very- similar, only that he is in search of the various Heritage items. Well, since Yuski has the book, I guess he's going to use it to get rid of the Reapers soon. I just hope Prime doesn't get hurt. I like him ^-^ Reminds me of my own unwritten character Alethen.

Seifer should get his tail kicked and giving a giant double-helping of canned whoop-** from Shi. He strikes me as a arrogant little whelp who hasn't outgrown his shell-tooth and yet, is trying to eat raw meat. Hopefully he grows out of his stupidity, but till then, I'll continue disliking him. ^.- Good work in writting out a contrast to Shi; a strong character who appears to hold up against Shi, giving the readers a backdrop to compare him against.

I wouldn't mind dying in a place of decay. Swamps are a fetid graveyard, an abundant land of endless death; a source of strength and power. "Where the gate opens for the passage of souls, therein lies the potential for great power, for Fallen or Divine purpose."

Still, he's in a forest, much better suited to him than that which I intend to dump my Death-Invoker. ^.- To each their own, I guess. I suppose Shi would be extremely irked to find that he is at the mercy of the girl he threatened to kill earlier. He would probably wake up and woner why he isn't dead yet.

The language usege is quite good, but try to vary your adjectives and verbs. I've got the same problem too, that's why I try to use the thesarus as often as possible. Try to substitute verbs when you find yourself using them more than twice in a passage. The questions add a sense of tension into the paragraphs, but utilising it too often would work against you. Keep that in mind, but hell, you're good at it!

Keep up the good work! I'll be checking back soon. ^-^

Good to see you updating again!

From what I see, it's time for her to repay her debt somewhat..

Good 'fic. Onii, keep writing.. x.X; The suspense is killing me. And this is Suzie btw. o.o;

Quite a different one from the other fics I've seen you write. Seems a lot darker in a sense, but it's an interesting concept!