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| Water to Ice 2004-12-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseI don't like it, sorry. I've read other pieces by you and they were really good. Ta ta for now |
| Deavon Brooks 2004-11-24 ch 1,  | abusewell, it's a good poem. i don't know how to criticise it b/c i don't know what you were trying to achieve with this poem. If you weren't trying to achieve anything, but just expressing your thoughts through this poem, then i would like to congratulate you on writing the poem. very straightforward, but next time, maybe trying to add depth to the poem would help, or explaining (but not in sentences, since you're writing a poem) why you feel the way you do, and what causes you to feel this way... (hope I helped;) BTW: I also appreciate reviews for my poems... unless you have friends at fictionpress that have fp accounts, there's not really a huge chance of people reviewing you. But even when your friends DO review you, you feel special when people you don't know review you. (well, I feel like that, anyway.) |
| whatsapenname 2004-11-16 ch 1, | abuseILL REVIEW FOR YOU! i liked it. lovely big up-yours to society. i liked the last two lines. ~whatsa~ |