beautiful, just beautiful! If you ever do decide to write the full the story I hope I would be first in in line to read it, woohoo!

Seriously you had such amazing detail while leaving little blanks for the reader to come up with on their own, a real sensory experience!

woah! very cool ;P it makes u feel so sorry for him though, lol...but anyway...it was a great story and a great idea, and it was great...for lack of more original word...

WOW. that was truly awesome. very well written and the character was simply amazing. he reminds me of raistlin from dragonlance. (haven't read it? you should!) very many kudos and i hope you update soon with more.