this is fabulous. i like version 1 best but they're both great. the ending ties everything up so well if you change anything in the poem (even though you shouldn't...) don't change the last line! but that's just my opinion ~evaa

Wow, very deep and moving. I really enjoyed them both. I feel that the second one stood out more, but the first flowed easilier. But altogether, great!

Hi its imanauror This is uber cool! Good job! :) I like it a lot.xoxoxoAasia

I really liked this. The first one was better in my opinion. It flowed more, and the emotions in it rushed out at me more.

I liked this one...really...dark!

I like the first one better. I think it flows better.