I read two paragraphs and I was hooked.
Read chapter one, and this is a definite fave.
You, my friend, are a VERY skilled writer.

I love it!
off to read more.

you never did write what happened with Callisto's family and here burial... everyone thinks she is dead..

you change the use of tense in this chapter from being told in first person to being told in third person...this is moving so so quickly... you should try to lengthen your chapters next time as you seem to be full of ideas and wanting to write them down but missing vital information along the way and through the journey...also it seems very childish that Charon would try to strangle the old dead man...

um... i take it from your writting that you are a young person as your writting is not quite mature. I think that you may have gone a little over board with the whole mother's culinary food skils and the dinner anticipation... it just kind of seemed like you were chucking in some words to make it sounds good however, the image didn't make it to my mind. The chapter moves along very quickly, which can be good.. but in this case... we haven't actually been properly introduced to Charon and so there is no atmosphere to the environment of the character and his personality. Anyway, i will stop there and continue reading...

I like what's happening so far. And this is where he meets the other girl am I correct?

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Ha! That last bit was funny. So... I don't think I'm going to review for every chapter from now on. How about every 3 or 4? Ok.

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Ah yes. I remember that Greek tale. It was very good. I liked it a lot. I just have one question: Will Callisto escape Charon's body? And isn't Charon a name for death in an old legend?

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OH WOW! What if his parents see him in the mirror? Oh dear...

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OH! Goody! Another reaper!

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whoa... He died? I can't wait for the next chapter. Oh and you have a few spelling mistakes I should tell you about but other than that the story is going really great...

Oh! Sinister! I love it. Hey when you get the chance why don't you check out my stuff? I've got some poetry and stories that maybe you'd like to read.

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Well... I guess Christmas IS coming up now isn't it? Merry Christmas to you...

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P.S: LOVE the most recent chapter. I think that maybe Callisto should be sad about her being dead. She seems indifferent, uncaring... Ah well so would I.

OH! Possession! I relish the thought...

You know? I think she should have stayed alive, but not a transparent phantom, but then again I doubt this is a romance what with death in the plot... Hmm... Actually that's not a bad idea.

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P.S: Still pretty good and if you revise it, I'd think about adding more details and not hurrying right into the facts... So far it's pretty good though...

WHOA!! Already a victim? Hmm... Some constructive criticism. Maybe you're going too fast with some of the details? It's still very good. Well, I'm off to chapter 3.

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