I very much liked this, but had a little difficulty with the rhythms, if that makes sense. I love the depth of meaning you convey through the use of simple, stark words. Very nice.

wow that was great.

P.S. thanks for reviewing my work. :)

Great job with this. I know exactly what you mean. Too bad your dream is my reality...

Wow. Very nice- I like the emotions, and how you go from one spectrum to another with them. Good job, and keep it up!