That was good. The sentence structure and the breaking of the verses at key points makes it much more interesting.

AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME!

I very much enjoyed the symmetry of this piece. The simplicity of tone and wording is lovely.

Short and sweet, but so sad. good job.

That's so nicely done! It flows well- I dont think i could ever do somehting that short, with those few words in a line. It is kind of sad, though.

That got pretty weird by hey, what do I know right? Anyway...have a great day, I won't ask you if you want fries cause no one ever does...lolKetchup?Gaki Toki