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| Cyro Kraken 2005-12-23 ch 1,  | abuseplease! write more |
| jive maxwell 2005-04-28 ch 1, | abuseLots of fighting, woot, and a Vampire named Jeff, that kicks major ass. I LIKE it! It's word, lol. |
| Widom 2005-03-25 ch 1, | abuseI love this! Demon hunters...what could be better? Nothing, except of course, you writing another chapter to this (wink wink nudge nudge) |
| Electra Black 2004-11-30 ch 1, | abuseHi! I'm reviewing this before school, ehhehehe, and I'm listening to the Sex Pistols again. ^_^ I really loved this one- it's great. I lurve vampyness! *Mwahaha* Im a huge Buffy fan myself, so ya know, Vampires are good. Excellent work! Keep it up and thanks for the review! It made me smile! E.B x |
| Tk.T 2004-11-20 ch 1, | abuseFloor length black skirt? A skirt is supposed to be short, so by saying "Floor length" it doesn't make any sense. From what I've read...it's Ok. I think you need to beef up your plot and work a little harder on character development here. Please don't make this some other cliche vampire story, FP has too many of them... Expand your characters and storyline and I'll get back to you. Also, your grammar needs a little work. (But who am I to talk?) Needs work, good potential here. Over all, pretty good. Happy writing!Tk.T~ |