I. Love. The. Last. Line. Well done, no mistakes I can find because it's so short and elegant...

A very power poem, reflects the nature of humanity in many ways as well as the base inner struggle of one own inner desires. Very nice work. I also love you you formatted it, makes an excellent impression.

I really enjoy your poetry! It very unique; "Forgiven Evil" was kewl as well :)You seem to have some stories as well, like "Tale of Tifa"? Are you going to post it? What about the rest? Do you have a fanfiction.net profile?

Curious... you don't like men?Anyway, it seems like you wrote this poem at a moment of boredom. It rhymes but it doesn't have much soul in it. Keep trying though, you'll get there sooner or later. Ever tried writing an epic poem? (A poem that tells a story) I think you'll be good in that.