 Judith the Dark 2004-12-31 . chapter 1That is one powerful poem. I really liked it. I have always felt an affinity (sp?) for the Phoenix. I've always kind of felt that I was a Phoenix in my own right.
This poem looks at a side that's a bit darker than most, even I, have looked at. The side that dies countless times...the pain of burning alive over and over again. I especially liked the line:
"His tears evaperate away."
I thought that was a very powerful one.
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I read your profile and I saw that in the summary of this one you mentioned your martial arts instructor. I'm also a martial artist and I have a few poems that I have written that have been inspired by my art (Aikido). I was wondering if you would be so kind as to take a look at them? I would like to get another martial artist's view on them.
By the way, if I may ask, what martial art do you learn?
Anway, sorry for the really, really drawn out review. Great job! Keep writing. I will have to check out some more of your work. ^_^
~CR |