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| Islandbreeze 2005-10-12 ch 2,  | abuseThat was weird...but cool. But weird. I like it. I think using the thoughts in with the description works really well, and the whole reaper part was really intriguing so that even though I'm not exactly sure I get this, I still want to read because I want to get it. So thats good. One little thing- normally, you should write out numbers under twenty, and I noticed in this chapter and the last you have numbers just in number form, like 8. It just looks more professional if they're written out. I like the story so far. |
| Islandbreeze 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is interesting, kind of like stream of conciousness, but with a little mystery and lots of good description. The part about the new painted colors fading is cool...this is a little confusing, but I think I like it. |
| Unclaimed 2005-10-12 ch 3, | abuseI like it...keep going. A little confusing but if you think you can follow it. Good luck! |
| JenniRose 2005-05-23 ch 1, | abuseThat was really weird. I liked it, good job. |
| C.J. Mahan 2004-11-24 ch 1, | abuseYou've done it again... ... ... Dyce. Awesome story. |
| kewldevice 2004-11-23 ch 1, | abuseFunny, I like it. Sounds a bit like that one movie, where the afterlife is merely a test to determine if one is ready for the "next phase" or if they need to start from birth again. Or something like that... It has been many years. Anyway, I think what you've got here sounds promising and you should finish it if possible. I really like your voice and you sound experienced. Good job. |