It's very pretty, I like the way some of the lines are inverted. Excellent job.

Very good rhyming there! It was very deep, and there's so much emotion in this that I can feel it when I read it. The language is pretty good too. Well done!

Beautiful. Just beautiful. I can tell this came right from your heart. Remember hope is never gone. When the night's over it will rise again like the sun. Just hold on.

Wow... feeling poetic. Sorry for that little piece of cornage, but awesome poem, keep writing.