This chapter was better then your previous! It was realistic and I like that. Anyway, I'll review the rest later I promise! (You have A LOT of stuff!) Thanks for the reviews btw.Aasia

I like this, but the beginning was pretty typical. But its okay, so you really don't have to worry about it. I like your dialogue, its so realistic! Finally, someone who doesn't have their characters talking either to smartly or too ditzy! There are some things I think you could do, like give us information in different forms, rather then just telling us. You're characters can think, remember that. Anyway, that's all I have to say. Good job! Keep up the good work!~Aasia