i loved it lol it gets a really good picture into your head...

~*silverwing*~

I think this is really good! A bit lengthly, but some songs are so. :-)

Good structure, I like the repetitiveness. It sort of gave it the feel of a song. My only suggestion is that you might want to rethink your line breaks, as some of them seen unnatural.

I remember thinking along these lines in year 8, back when everyone was still trying to get to know one another. If this weren't a song, I'd criticise the repetition of the chorus. But all's well. Thing is, though, this piece, lovely written piece that it is... Not very reassuring? Are you encouraging us to simply sit there and hope to be noticed? (If I had done that I'd be waiting forever, thus self-esteem and a good measure of confidence, mes amis.)

wow, that describes that feeling of being so cluless and trapped perfectly^^i relate to this, so you did a great job!!keep writing!

Interestingly written. I like the repetition, but perhaps it's too much? Also, the formatting is a little odd. But it's very intersting, I love the sentiment. You're saying something really cool here. Nice! And thanks for the review!

well done! nice deep emotions and i like the beat of it! also nice rhyming! ;)

Hi! This is wonderful and very sad. I can relate to these feelings big time. I've always been the outcast. Beautiful poem.

wow. This was amazing. You are a very talented writer. I love you stories and I really like this song. I wish I could write songs. I have tried...but I just don't have the knack for it.Great job!

Wow, great song! I think you could tighten it a wee bit - you make the lines more powerful by cutting out unnecessary words e.g. "And I never really knew you could feel this alone Struggle through your day just to get back home" would have more impact if you made it seem more certain i.e 'I never knew you could feel this alone Struggle through your day to get back home' - just a thought anyway. Love it-Write on!

You've really got some talent for writing Poetry (the word kind of reminds of of middle earth :P) You MUST write more.

Fellow Math Hater,

-Alareic-

wow, I like it. I wish I could write lyrics. I'm good with the music part, but lyrics just don't come to me...so keep up the good work. I know it can be hard to come up with the words.

Hey senpai, this is so uber-awesome. I lurve it! Wayttago.

Talked to Jaime lately?

wow, that was beautiful. i love it.