"a seizure called life" I like... this is a bit dark, but very good...I'd like to clear something up quickly, though-you read my 'story' and I'd like to let you know it's a guy (reading it over I realized it's deceiving because he flips his hair) anyway, it made me laugh on a sucky day... thanks

I like the second to last stanza. It's a very interesting concept, as is the poem as a whole. It's original. That's something hard to find these days. Well done.

Wow. That was ... Wow. Very thought provoking,and very imagraic. (is that a word?) Very nice. Well done! - ^.^

A little confusing, but thats just me. I'm a little slow on the uptake sometimes. After a few more times I'll understand. The parts I got I love though. Blessed Be.

i like it but its missing something, the wording lacks...eloquence...i like the idea though and the images are striking as well as certain lines.

also...(thank you for your review of scraps, however the title was specificly chosen not to relate to the poem but to the idea that certain lines just come to a person and deserve to be written. i didnt want fire to be a central image as it was more of a slight metaphor. thank you for your critisicm, but your suggestion of how the lines should go were in fact the creation of a completely different poem. it was good though, i suggest you upload it as your own as the connection between the two ideas was slight. forgive me, i would have emailed this but time did not allow it. and i did understand what you were saying. thanks again)charon

Another awesome poem. :) Very descriptive and well-written. Great lines in this one. Excellent title; it fits the poem very nicely. Keep writing! -Dathomiran