Reviews for Where'd My Normal Life Go?

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Ever Since That Day 2007-11-25 ch 8,	abuseHas this story been discontinued? I sure hope not, I love this story to pieces.
Ever Since That Day 2007-06-13 ch 8, anon.	abuseThis doesn't seem to be your best, but I love the plot line and would really like to see it continued with your new style.
NinjAlt 2007-06-02 ch 8,	abuseAww man. This story looks really promising. Why dont you update anymore? PLEASE UPDATE! I'd like to see Amy with some magic.
AshleyFetterman 2007-01-25 ch 8,	abuseNO! don't do IT! Amy Don't give in! AH! lolz.. very good! i like it... although i want conant and Amy to get together
callmebelle 2006-02-27 ch 1,	abuseHey-I'm going to do some edits as I go along, K? Just some grammar etc. stuff for now... content comments later. "Sahen obviously took this as an invitation to sit because that’s exactly what he did." You could cut out the 'because that's exactly what he did.' it's implied, and will be stronger without it. Calling Sahen cute could be more descriptive- you've already gone through the eyes, hair and lips, but give us some more details, some more similies. “Good luck with all that Math. I hate math." Maybe take out the 'I hate math', and just put in a "she said jokingly" after the first part or something. Having the second sentence weakens the dialogue. "Her friend shook his head causing his shaggy brown hair to swing which in turn caused water to spray all over the place." add commas somewhere! it's a bit awkward right now. "The girl had glanced around and had found Sahen sitting with the school’s biggest flirt and slut Cheryl." Take out the 'Cheryl' at the end, and add some more description to when Amy talks about him sitting with her. Give examples of Conant's cutting remarks to Sahen. The ending seemed a bit abrubt, but it works. Overall, pay attention to commas. You need to add a bunch in, but that's just proof reading. Great job- it's a very interesting story! I look forward to reading more :)
Ser 2005-12-18 ch 1, anon.	abuseAnd here I was thinking it wasn't possible to add every cliche to a story.
Mad-4-Manga 2005-10-01 ch 7,	abuseWow.NEATO! ^_^VERY cool chapter, I really like it. ^_~Well, Amy found out about Sahen and is pretty open about it, which is interesting. . . I know I would most likely be curious about the whole 'blood sucking' thing. >.>UIt's interesting that Amy is just the shortened version of her name, a little odd her full name be. I wonder why she was named that?Anywho, very intriguing this chapter is! ^_^ It raises a lot of questions and continues with others, one can only hope that the person(s) who burst(s) through the door is(are) Amy's parents. ^_~ I'm really looking forward to that explanation.Well, good job on this updated chapter! ^_^ GREAT JOB!
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 6,	abuseCOOL. O.OI am ensnared into your story web. Please update?
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 5,	abuseNice. ME LIKE! ^_^
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 4,	abuse0,0COOL.I WAANT MORE! YAY! ^_^
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 3,	abuse^_^ I LIKE THIS STORY! AWESOME! VERY awesome story line! ^_~ It's extremely captivating!
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 2,	abuseInteresting. Me like! ^_^Let me guess, Amy's parents are the Great Ones, no?
Mad-4-Manga 2005-07-31 ch 1,	abuseXD What's that saying? Be careful what you wish for, you might get it?LOL. Interesting story! ^_^
MoonlightSilverMadz 2005-01-14 ch 5,	abuseAw, how sweet! Her first date! -Claps wildly- I can't wait for more! Madi
Hatrack 2004-12-04 ch 4,	abuseVery good up to this point. Update soon, I can't wait to see what happens.

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