You have a nice beginning. I find first-person narration a lot easier to read (not to mention a lot more fun). You have some good event discription and character development going on here. Keep it up!

Everyone loves a mage.

"“Greetings; I am Evvan, Prince of Kiergstadd, Duke of Alagany..."I would probably replace the semi-colon with a full stop. I dont think you need the semi-colon there.

"The prince standing above me feinted"shouldn't 'prince' be capitalised as that is the name of the person we are referring to.

"to me by my father after for one of my birthdays."

after for!? please clarify

good start however