It seamed very strange to have the main point-of-view coming from that of the flame. It like it and for somereason I feel simularity with the flame for some reason. There is some chemistry in this song I dont understand, but I like it.

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I love this...the way you describe the flames, and make them seem like a willful creature... Simply amazing.

I read this on Kat's site... hee hee, Kat... anywho, I immediatly fell in love with it, so I want it! Give me a melody and record it and make an album and make tons of cash and give me! You're such a great writer, dearest Blaze, and that's gift you shouldn't take for granted. I really wish I could do something as good as this...

I think I like the fact flames are mentioned the most... hee hee hee...

Tatianna Blusummers

Pretty Burny Light Thing!

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awesome poem. wonderfully written, nice rhyming, rhythm, and imagery. i like this. good job.

Just... wow. The concept, the diction, rhyming, rhythm... all excellent. There's power here, and beauty, and... life. Amazing write.

Hey, hun ^_^ Got your last review--thanks : ) The 'make him late' part refers to when you call someone 'late' when they've died. But anywho. This is, I think, the first thing of yours you ever showed me (and has a happy home on my website still : )) and I love the descriptive language that you use. The meter is nice and flowing and the rhyme-scheme is spifferific, as well ^_^ Can't wait to read more!

overall very good - i love the idea it's based on - extremely unique.i noticed one thing - in the refrain, you probably want to say "has taken" or just "took" instead of "has took"also, in the fifth to last stanza, try "knew" instead of "had known" to keep with the same verb tense.

but the rhyming is impressive - doesn't feel forced at all,and i especially like the imagery in the refrain.good job!

Wow... what an awesome poem! It had form, rhythm, rhyme and everything! Very interesting (and cool) idea you have there. And the poem flowed.

Loved the rhyming~ gives the whole thing such an eerie flow~waters better than fire! Mwhahaa~keep writing^^

~Never the same~

wow, i really liked this one, it would be really cool if you made a story out of it, or something like that. I liked the flow of it, how everything just fit into to place like that. Good Job!-Zephyr