Gosh...this poem is really good. I'm not kidding.

It was quite touching, a bit angsty, but very true, something we can all relate too. The emotions in it, it's very very...I'm not sure how to describe it, but it's awesome.

"Left alone in the dark and cold Because you think forgiving's too bold"

=S I'm not sure if it's just me, but the rhythm and flow is abit weird here. =S

Overall, great job, very powerful piece. =)

A very nice free-verse poem (?). It has a simple message that is written both directly and indirectly. It shows how powerful words can be and the ignorance and diffculty that people have in forgiving it.

The rhymes work really well. The only thing wrong with this poem is that the ending is a little sudden.

hi serana...i really liked this poem..sounds like you can really take lit and still do well. and the rhyming's good..my poems don't rhyme.

Great poem, Serana. The rhythm is slightly off on some phrases but the poem flows beautifully. :) *thumbs up!* I love the emotion behind it.

I read your poem and I like it. The fact that it rhymes makes it run together much better, I think. But it makes it seem less anguished. Is that what you were trying to do? Or have I just been reading Dr. Seuss too much?