Holy **! The ending literally made me jump. Awesome awesome awesome job.

Very strange, but I liked it.

that was...interesting. i can't say that i've never read stories that ended that way. the end was a little bit of a disappointment for me, but it was still wonderfully written. i felt rather bad for the poor little fellow. well, he did say he'd sacrifice anything...

Ouch, that was harsh. Very good written!

Wow, harsh yet very beautiful. The descriptive language was perfect. Short yet effective. A surprising twist. Good job.

Jesus, loved the ending. Good story.

that's harsh. but very well written. i ttally get what you mean about the evil alternate reality in your head. back to this, i think the woman is kickass, you wrote evil so well. and there are more *scampers off to read about more evil* keep writingmember Pay it ForwardBrooke Monroe