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| aleppine 2005-02-03 ch 1,  | abuseOh, I've missed reading your writing. I adore the title/start of first line. Maybe it's the V and the N, but there's just something about the word 'November' all on its own. I think of it as the seam between autumn and winter, sometimes more a penumbra ... I don't get that feelingabout it described in this poem at all (rather for me, November is brilliant because it's so a) dark and b) still near start of academic year and thus miles away from mad examania of the spring/summer), but really enjoyed reading about it from this viewpoint. Hm ... as always, can't resist pulling out favourite bits that really made me think 'o, yummery'. 'The weeks have woken up' (and the end of that sentence too, why not) ... 'grey clouds prepare a basin for my doubt' - YES. YESYESYES. It's the word 'basin'. And my personal obsession with 'grey' (usually as 'silver'). Although used re: doubt, that made me think of empyrean pensieves (a la Harry Potter), that did. 'of brown-leafed trees who sigh their names / on winter nights, when no one hears...' *shivers* I love November. And I love the question. A dark adrenaline? (I always get that...) *sigh* That was a great few minutes of readery. November does sleep, maybe, perhaps hibernates ... but I always feel like it definitely wakes up at night. Next: December and the deep, dank darkness. Meh. I shoulda read this earlier, like maybe before almost-spring period. |
| Kellza 2004-12-29 ch 1, | abuseThis was a pleasure to read, and I'm adding it to my favorites so that I won't forget to come back and read it again. "Do you blame me for adrenaline?" That line adds a quirky smile to the otherwise wistful tone of the poem, and I love it. |
| First Lady 2004-12-28 ch 1, | abuseDon't worry, we can still tell where the stanza breaks are. I think. Beautiful. I love the idea of sweeping the shadows... and all the adjectives, so creative, like "frost-doomed" and such. Hyphens are good. Just be sure not to overuse them. Good job! |
| Eirien 2004-12-08 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem, I love the imagery in this and the atmosphere that is created, I felt all those feelings I associate with November myself. |
| godawful teen-angst poetry 2004-12-07 ch 1, | abuseI love it. You have such a pretty, natural style. ...and yes. FP formatting sucks...you know they now *don't* support html through notepad? That's the one way you could really control everything before...now its up to the technological whims of their auto-formatter. sigh. Not that it matters at this point anyway... |
| Manuel Fajar 2004-12-04 ch 1, | abuseMellow yellow champagne with grey. Interesting admixture. m p.s. BTW FP's Quickedit allows you to format your work. If you're on a Mac you'll have to download Mozilla's Firefox browser (IE and Safari didn't work for me.) You can also use the Export feature to place works you've already posted into Quickedit and reformat or edit them. |
| Magpie Poet 2004-12-03 ch 1, | abusestanza breaks? geeze, you want everything?! :) you have a good feel for november, though i'm not sure december is an improvement. |