Bravo! The nine lives thing was clever. I like the ending, too.

The descirptions rock in this chapter. The fight scene is sepecially good.

Awesome ending! I thought the anglerfish thing was a little weird at first, but it tied in at the end.

Yay! I like the cliffhanger. It makes you wanna keep reading.

I still love this story. I like how you explain the history of the Archipelago without interrupting the flow of the story. Parts of this chapter are kinda choppy, though. Like the description of Sirisangul. You should combine some of the short sentences to make more complex ones.

This story is awesome! I like the way you begin, it catches your attention and leads you into the rest of the chapter. The only criticism I have is that you should be more careful of typos. But I can't wait to finish Volume I so I can read Volume II!

i like Aysha. Relena is...blah. at least she is so far. dont like her at all. plus i've only seen her twice and both times she was nasty

~Mack

oh no! she got hit? she seemed like a very good friend...*frowns*

~Mack

yay action! action is always fun. this is still a good story but i kind of miss the fun quirks like in the first chapter

~Mack

there were a lot of typos with caps in this one, u didnt wanna capatalize the dialogue i noticed. i liked the scenario about learning how to be a "hero" very interesting concept uve created

~Mack

careful of repeating the same word over and over again in close paragraphs. it stops the nice flow. this was an interesting chapter what with the boat. ur certainally keeping with the action

~Mack

nevermind im not sure i like Vilas. this is an interesting turn. where did the "royal" girl go tho? im still curious about her, though these new things are interesting

~Mack

i liked this cliffhanger more than the last, makes me wonder what is going to happen. still some things feel a bit rushed but obviously its not like u got my opinion before you wrote this. i think i like Vilas so far, tho we havent met him much. i liked the note about the kitchen girls really liking Marcus it gave me a good visual of what kind of a guy he was. careful of awk sent structures

~Mack

Isaac seemed pretty quick to befriend him, maybe some extra effort could have been put into making them friends. it seemed like he just insulted him and then they were buddies and isaac was wishing him well. careful not to rush i guess is the note. so he's the servant now? interesting process, i thought, about picking them. i thought that was a good idea.

~Mack

indeed a cliffhanger...but i dont need to worry about it because i can just click the next chapter button. this was more full of action and so u had to add details so the fun personality of the narrator was as fresh, but thats not CC just something i noticed. onto the next chapter...

~Mack