a nice ending to round up the poem. again you keep your descriptive touch throughout the poem.

Beautiful imagery, exactly how I pictured Eden (the fairies are a nice twist too). And thanks for the reveiw (the day I wrote that I actually had a choker on w/a small lock and key:)I really love your poetry I'm going to try and reveiw them all when I have time

I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT. *obssesses* dang, yongquan, you're really good. wonderful description, imagery, what else can i say? it's perfect. and simply so. *tears out hair* -kismet.

Um. I'm not a poet myself, so of course my understanding of poems are bad, but I take it to mean you are narrating how Eden got corrupted. I like the last stanza, possibly because it's the only one I kind of get, which is by no means your fault. Although I think the first stanza is quite...irrelevant. But it does build up the beauty of Eden. So...pretty good work here.