 simpleplan13 2009-07-26 . chapter 174I like the title. The alliteration was nice. I also like how you incorporated the lyrics. However, since so much of the piece is lyrics, it felt way too short. Maybe you could add another stanza? |
 simpleplan13 2009-03-16 . chapter 173"& Knows that all the men in her life will never stay."... capitalizing the K felt awkward here
Also, your apostrophes look odd. I do like the piece thought. It makes a really good point. |
 simpleplan13 2009-01-05 . chapter 172I love the title, it's funny and true about most people. I also like the word choice a lot. Especially in the beginning of the last stanza. |
 simpleplan13 2008-12-06 . chapter 171Really nice. I like your word choices a lot. The last line is especially great. |
 Irresistible Apple 2008-12-01 . chapter 17Breathtaking, as usual. This one is my favorite. I think you did a marvekous job adressing the questions and fears that most people have to confront at some point in their lives.
~Amanda |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 9Really good poem. I like the metaphor of the Sphinx with the riddle to your life. If you don't get it right, you'll die, right?
I promise I'll review more later.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 8This really captures the mood of a starch white doctor's office with out of date magazine's on the table for you to read while you wait. I definitely know how that feels.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 7As I'm not a Spanish-speaker, I decided to use a couple of translators. I think I lost something in translation, but it still seemed quite beautiful to me. Short and simple.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 6This poem was really emotional. Is it actually based on personal experience, or is this something you thought of one day and had to write? Either way, it's really well-felt.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 5The various images that you give in the poem are stunning. I love how you juxtaposed the beauty of nature versus the precision of science and mathematics; it's poems like these that are meeting the twenty-first century, proving poetry is not dead.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 4I love how your style sometimes resembles that of a mixture between Allen Ginsberg and William Shakespeare's. When I read the last stanza espcially I was getting a real sonnet vibe. Also, I like the third stanza. The dropped vowels made me read it more carefully.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 3This one made me laugh, for some reason. I want to quote it to some girls... and guys at my school. Well done.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 2This poem is aptly named. It's quite cynical, and yet there's a lot of truth in it. THis line especially mirrored a lot of what I'm thinking lately:
'Soldier versus terrorist,
Difference’s how you kill.'
Just so revealing and thought-provoking.
-Stardust. |
 The Vegetarian Serial Killer 2008-11-28 . chapter 1Okay, I'm going to take the plunge. This preface has convinced me to do so. Your style is really excellent- it draws pictures in my head.
-Stardust. |
 simpleplan13 2008-08-11 . chapter 170I like the rhyme scheme, it was interesting and nicely done. |