Has great impact, both style and content. Because the story and style was so unusual, I didn't know what to expect (except to hope for a rescue!), so did not anticipate the shooting.well done

Well, I liked it. Nicely written. A little predictable (as in I knew she would kill herself), but I liked the way you presented it, with the prayer interjected throughout. I also liked the short sentences, much more impactful than long descriptive ones would have been. All in all, good work, keep writing :o)