(-shiver-) Ugh, high school flashbacks. Couldn't stand the place myself.

But not liking high school aside, I did like the story. I was especially happy that Ashley found it in her to be strong to stay by her husband for a good fight ahead. A great many other women would have broken or given up, or turned their anger on a extremely foolish husband. Admirable, that.

And I did like the last line. That does sum it up: "Lily had failed."

This was an interesting twist on the usual love story. Seems like each character was all too human with their doubts and pettiness, which made it easy to relate to them. Very well done! It'd be great if you continued this and had one of those dramatic courtroom scenes where Dylan's lawyer destroys Lily on the witness stand! Sigh. I think I've been watching too many 'Law and Order' reruns lately.

Wow.

I'm not sure what else to say.

This was a school writing project? It's amazingly well done. That and now I want to know the outcome of the court case... but that's beside the point.

I'm impressed with how you portrayed Ashley's feelings of betrayal and confusion before she talked to Dylan, and the fact that crushes are hard to get over!

Beautifully done (I think!), and I'm so glad that you decided to plug your original fics on the Consirator forum...

great work, sweety!

~Kasi.