I can't wait to read more! And, when are you going to write more on the first story?

All in all it's really good. My only criticism of it is the jumping around between Zephyr and Leon. I kind of got hooked on one character and then when I was expecting more about them you changed to the other character. Then again it could be a very clever way to keep the reader interested in the story. Should that be the case, I suggest not doing it too much either that or lengthen the chapters a bit.The use of Illyria's character to keep Leon in the dark, so to speak, was clever, as you don't actually say where Leon is the reader has to base it on the knowledge from the chapters where Zephyr is talking with the angel.It's cleverly written anyway. Keep writing it, I want to see where this goes.

Chay

It's a working progress. I'm working on three stories at the moment, with this being the middle one. Obviously my focus is finishing the first story (Rise of Evil), but every now and again I'll add a little to this story. The random scenes will mostly be incorporated to the stories later on (I hate skipping chapters...).

This is very very short, and it might just be the length but it seems kind of plotless. There's almost no description, but to be fair there is almost nothing. A few more words could work up a good picture of your characters, outline their history for those of us that arn't aware of it, give it atmosphere and some idea of a plot. Write more.