| Reviews for The storm |
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CerriC 1/26/05 . chapter 1This is sad... I like it, though there are a few minor errors I've noticed. And that voice that I adorn ...shouldn't that be 'adore'? Then go searching in the storm...I think you want 'than', which contrasts, instead of 'then', which is used for sequences (is that the right word?). |
Veral42 12/31/04 . chapter 1I like it. It's not all that powerful of a poem, but it holds a ertain... eloquence, to it. Keep up the good work. |
Love-Is-Bitter-Sweet 12/23/04 . chapter 1Wow...you ARE GOOD! THank you SO much for reading my poem! I get what you're saying about how Darkness should be feared. But seriously, did you like my poem? I'd like to know. And you're right, as I get older (i'm only 13), my writing WILL mature, and it'll probably get better. (Though by people's standards it is pretty good. well...my book is...but i have to finish that, then edit it). Although my writing may be slightly immature, I get that and agree. THanks for reviewing and I have to say, it's an amazing poem that you wrote... |
Impressionist 12/17/04 . chapter 1absolutely beautiful. it's cold and haunting and I love it:) |
Funky 12/7/04 . chapter 1 Kind of like that other poem where I tried to decipher it but failed miserably. Green I think it was called. |
LilLaTLuv 12/6/04 . chapter 1Hey! It doesn't seem like you love whoever that was so much. Or were you talking about a bird? A bird's sweet song and the spring's sweet smells all around, surrounding you with the beauty of the new. But it doesn't seem to say much for a conscience. I liked it a lot though. It shows us things about you and make you think. Great job! Keep writing! Luv ya,Tashi :) |